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SEO: I'm new to Clarity, can you Clarity Gurus and Professionals take a look at my profile to let me know what's missing/bad? I'm quite new here...!
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Joseph Peterson, Names, Domains, Sentences and Strategies answered:

It needs some basic revision to eliminate errors.

For starters, the tag line

"Changing the way how online businesses perform..."

ought to be either "the way" or "how" – not both.

Even so, that's a bit vague. Rather than hire an editor, hire a writer. I'm not cheap, but I'd do it for you if you were in the market to hire a specialist.

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